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  • RodneySchofield
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    I love writing essays. It is one of the best methods in modern university education system. Don’t you agree? I think that we have to learn how to work with information and how to put in words what we are thinking about things we have learned. Yes? But there a few subjects that I don’t like. Ordering an essay on essayhave reviews is allowed in that case, I presume. Why not? If you are writing everything else by your strength.

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  • isurfneptune
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    Originally posted by john doe View Post
    Why is living in a studio needed. Why is a home needed. People go camping all the time as recreation. If the minimum wage gets you above the level of camping (say, living in a car) then it should be good enough. Truckers go weeks on end living in a space no larger then a tent. I once met a man running across the country and he spent most nights rapped in a tarp in some random park. I used to work out of my own van. If worse came to worse living in it would have been a few blankets and a cheap solar panel away.

    Also working over 40 hours a week is just a fact of life. Yes I get overtime pay at my job but working less then 45 hours in a week very rarely happens. There is also nothing but a person's personal choices that makes a minimum wage job permanent. If you are hard working and competent you can easily move to better paying jobs fast. I've been working for long enough that I have seen it. So many people can't reach that basic level. It is just shithead after shithead. People who think all they have to do is show up for work and do the minimum and they will get more money.
    It was an assignment on homelessness in Miami (where the thingd you described are illegal and will land you in jail)

    But i can dig it man. I think everyone should live more independantly; more naturally.

    You guys inspired me to make a new thread in a little bit. I hope to hear all your ideas in it.

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  • isurfneptune
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    Originally posted by Matthew Shannon View Post
    I actually enjoyed reading that. I don't necessarily think that minimum wage laws are to blame though. I think the american employment structure and economic structure is incredibly flawed. Everything here is thought of in terms of money, which really fucks over a lot of people. Companies' main interests are to grow their profitability and ensure that stockholders' and the company owners' wealth is maximized rather than it being the betterment of society and providing people with something that they either need or will improve their quality of life. The huge focus on financial security encourages companies to underpay and under-appreciate employees by cutting costs where ever they can. The minimum wage tries to offset this corporate greed so its a good thing. The problem with it is that the minimum wage hasn't been adjusted enough for inflation.
    Thanks dude! I totally agree with you. In this essay i wanted to focus in on one problem that IMO doesnt get enough attention. I removed about 5/8ths of the info that was there to stay super focused and not lose any readers.

    What i talk about in my essay is only one of the side effects that result from the ongoing abuse of a system that wasnt designed with such abuse in mind. It may have been a good idea when that system was put in place, but its my belief that its time to reevaluate.

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  • john doe
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    Why is living in a studio needed. Why is a home needed. People go camping all the time as recreation. If the minimum wage gets you above the level of camping (say, living in a car) then it should be good enough. Truckers go weeks on end living in a space no larger then a tent. I once met a man running across the country and he spent most nights rapped in a tarp in some random park. I used to work out of my own van. If worse came to worse living in it would have been a few blankets and a cheap solar panel away.

    Also working over 40 hours a week is just a fact of life. Yes I get overtime pay at my job but working less then 45 hours in a week very rarely happens. There is also nothing but a person's personal choices that makes a minimum wage job permanent. If you are hard working and competent you can easily move to better paying jobs fast. I've been working for long enough that I have seen it. So many people can't reach that basic level. It is just shithead after shithead. People who think all they have to do is show up for work and do the minimum and they will get more money.

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  • Jakep4196
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    Originally posted by Matthew Shannon View Post
    I actually enjoyed reading that. I don't necessarily think that minimum wage laws are to blame though. I think the american employment structure and economic structure is incredibly flawed. Everything here is thought of in terms of money, which really fucks over a lot of people. Companies' main interests are to grow their profitability and ensure that stockholders' and the company owners' wealth is maximized rather than it being the betterment of society and providing people with something that they either need or will improve their quality of life. The huge focus on financial security encourages companies to underpay and under-appreciate employees by cutting costs where ever they can. The minimum wage tries to offset this corporate greed so its a good thing. The problem with it is that the minimum wage hasn't been adjusted enough for inflation.


    Sooooo Capitalism?

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  • Matthew Shannon
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    I actually enjoyed reading that. I don't necessarily think that minimum wage laws are to blame though. I think the american employment structure and economic structure is incredibly flawed. Everything here is thought of in terms of money, which really fucks over a lot of people. Companies' main interests are to grow their profitability and ensure that stockholders' and the company owners' wealth is maximized rather than it being the betterment of society and providing people with something that they either need or will improve their quality of life. The huge focus on financial security encourages companies to underpay and under-appreciate employees by cutting costs where ever they can. The minimum wage tries to offset this corporate greed so its a good thing. The problem with it is that the minimum wage hasn't been adjusted enough for inflation.

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  • isurfneptune
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    Originally posted by Jakep4196 View Post
    You're in Florida dude.
    Yeah? Im in Miami, whatsup? If ur here too im down as dinosaurs to skate. I havent been skating too long so im not the best, but i DO have a incredibly talented filmer and a pretty dooe editor too (have filmed me skateboarding)

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  • Jakep4196
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    You're in Florida dude.

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  • isurfneptune
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    Got an A! Fuckkkk yeah! The Professor said i had a very interesting argumentation and then talked to me after class about it and a professor at another college was also interested.

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  • Sergeant Butthurt
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    Congratulations, you have earned the Butthurt Stamp of Approval!
    Last edited by Sergeant Butthurt; 26.09.2013, 12:35.

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  • r.s.
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    Let's rollerblade.

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  • isurfneptune
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    Originally posted by welshroller18 View Post
    as the UK benefit system is a lot more generous its hard for me to compare, however that was very short for an essay?
    are you restricted heavily in word numbers?
    Yeah, the essay dealt exclusively with Miami-Dade County and you only understand it fully if you live here because youll know everything im talking about. Ive been here almost three years, on-off, im originally from Boston, Ma. And the homeless problem isnt nearly as bad, or as difficult to get by.

    Funny you say that. It was actually about four times as long. I took out alot of information. I shortened it up because i wanted to make sure someone read the whole thing and not intimidate them with boatloads of information. So i just put the bare bare bones of my argument. I'm glad i did too because its been getting some positive local attention (somehow all doctors or hospital workers....spot on prediction RWC)

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  • welshroller18
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    as the UK benefit system is a lot more generous its hard for me to compare, however that was very short for an essay?
    are you restricted heavily in word numbers?

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  • *ROYALwithCHEESE*
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    Originally posted by Apsley Cherry-Garrard View Post
    a social life/fun is not a right - it's a perk, a privilege, a bonus - it is not a necessity to survival or happiness. That's against the law. A worker in that situation has rights they need to exercise. They need to be an advocate for themselves, not stand around and take it. Even still, nobody is forcing them to work. Plus, they could go on welfare and get everything for free.



    i totally get your essay, but the points just aren't that strong. I'm sure you'll get a decent grade on it, though.
    Health professionals and workplace safety and health professionals would argue differently to that.

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  • isurfneptune
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    Originally posted by Apsley Cherry-Garrard View Post
    a social life/fun is not a right - it's a perk, a privilege, a bonus - it is not a necessity to survival or happiness. That's against the law. A worker in that situation has rights they need to exercise. They need to be an advocate for themselves, not stand around and take it. Even still, nobody is forcing them to work. Plus, they could go on welfare and get everything for free.



    i totally get your essay, but the points just aren't that strong. I'm sure you'll get a decent grade on it, though.

    I know. But that violates Amendment 14 by abridging those privileges. And amendment 13 because your not choosing to go beyond what is considered a full weeks worth of work, its involuntary. Its necessary for survival and thats pretty fucked

    You need to make less than $13,750 to qualify for government assistance here in Miami. And my essay was about the independent worker. As i believe everyone has the right to support themselves independently.

    Thank you dude. I appreciate it

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  • Jakep4196
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    I have not written an expository essay yet; but it can't differ too much from basic essay etiquette.

    A very boring read in my opinion. Could use a bit of spicing up as far as vocabulary goes, and perhaps better transitions between paragraphs as well? Also, concluding paragraph is a train wreck.



    Edit: Be careful about using exclamation points. "Rights are being violated blah blah wah wah wah!"

    You're trying to provide a factual argument; exclamation points appeal more on an emotional level, and in most cases you would want to end the statement with a period rather than an exclamation point.

    Periods = Fact - there is nothing to discuss, it is fact. More assertive.
    Exclamation = Might be a fact, but my passionate yelling allows others to disregard everything I have said.
    Last edited by Jakep4196; 24.09.2013, 23:06.

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  • Apsley Cherry-Garrard
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    Originally posted by isurfneptune View Post
    1. If 40 hours is considered Full-time by our government (and spending most of your life in work) than anything over called Overtime, which you get payed extra for because ur seriously no-lifing it at that point (ive never heard of ANY employer in Miami giving overtime; greedy fucks) than doing so to make ends meet is involuntary service for survival. Proving my point that it violates amendment 13

    2. Subject was homelessness in the city of Miami. I totally get you though. Great point.

    I hope u dont see this as snotty or sarcastic but i really do appreciate your arguments.
    a social life/fun is not a right - it's a perk, a privilege, a bonus - it is not a necessity to survival or happiness. That's against the law. A worker in that situation has rights they need to exercise. They need to be an advocate for themselves, not stand around and take it. Even still, nobody is forcing them to work. Plus, they could go on welfare and get everything for free.



    i totally get your essay, but the points just aren't that strong. I'm sure you'll get a decent grade on it, though.

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  • Apsley Cherry-Garrard
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    No, I don't see it as snotty or sarcastic. I see it like this: I, an English teacher, am giving you an English teacher's perspective on your essay. You, a student who wrote a paper, are giving me a student's perspective on your essay. Nothing wrong with that.

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  • isurfneptune
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    Originally posted by Apsley Cherry-Garrard View Post
    1. Why would they not be able to get any other job? Really, any other job. How about another job? Have you heard of people working two jobs? There are people who earn ABOVE minimum wage and work two jobs."The American Dream" (or whatever) was never said to be easy, only attainable.

    2. Move. If it costs too much to live where you are at, then move. Save $15 bucks, get on a bus, and move. I just got a job in a town 2+ hours from where I live. I went from a city to the middle of nowhere. But guess what, it's WAY cheaper out here. Where I was at it cost $500/month to rent a room in a stranger's house. Here it costs $500/month to rent a house. Again, nobody is forcing that person to make the choices he/she is making. It's a free country. You have rights (isn't that your point?). You can move.
    1. If 40 hours is considered Full-time by our government (and spending most of your life in work) than anything over called Overtime, which you get payed extra for because ur seriously no-lifing it at that point (ive never heard of ANY employer in Miami giving overtime; greedy fucks) than doing so to make ends meet is involuntary service for survival. Proving my point that it violates amendment 13

    2. Subject was homelessness in the city of Miami. I totally get you though. Great point.

    I hope u dont see this as snotty or sarcastic but i really do appreciate your arguments.

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  • isurfneptune
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    I'm 20 dude. Graduated at 16 but dropped out cuz college sucks when ur a jitt. I planned a 2 year break but then got caught up in competitive surfing n surfaris with a fellow surfer for another 2years. Just got back in school and taking my first semester (see "english composition 101" at the top left)

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  • Apsley Cherry-Garrard
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    Originally posted by isurfneptune View Post
    1. Because some people can't get any other job. Especially in Miami where its almost impossible to find one. Im Hispanic and in no way racist or xenophobic, but most jobs are filled by illegals who will take below minimum wage under the table. I was more getting at how you would waste most hours of your life to not have one. Idgaf if u give handjobs to squirrels, if you work full time doing ANYTHING you goddamn earned your right to stable living.

    2. Its Miami. Demand is so high while we have a tittyload of new immigrants coming in every day. I don't see that shit going down any time soon.
    1. Why would they not be able to get any other job? Really, any other job. How about another job? Have you heard of people working two jobs? There are people who earn ABOVE minimum wage and work two jobs."The American Dream" (or whatever) was never said to be easy, only attainable.

    2. Move. If it costs too much to live where you are at, then move. Save $15 bucks, get on a bus, and move. I just got a job in a town 2+ hours from where I live. I went from a city to the middle of nowhere. But guess what, it's WAY cheaper out here. Where I was at it cost $500/month to rent a room in a stranger's house. Here it costs $500/month to rent a house. Again, nobody is forcing that person to make the choices he/she is making. It's a free country. You have rights (isn't that your point?). You can move.

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  • Mike Stoll
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    How old are you?

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  • isurfneptune
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    Originally posted by Apsley Cherry-Garrard View Post
    I am not pro-homeless in any way, shape or form; This is based solely on the position you take.


    1. Being PAID any amount of money is in no way a punishment - let alone a cruel and unusual one. Nobody is forcing that person to take/work a minimum wage job. Nobody - no matter how you put it. That person has every option to apply for any job they are qualified for.

    2. Why do you attack minimum wage instead of the outrageous housing prices? A studio apartment for $1,400/month and you're attacking minimum wage?


    aside from that, your last sentence is a mess"
    "Using a housing plan composed of three phases –emergency, transitional, and permanent – along with supportive services and job placement, perhaps it isn’t the approach of the Homeless Trust that’s ineffective, but our Minimum Wage that is ineffective at protecting the full-time workers right to be a productive member of society instead of banishing them to live on the streets while other members of society ignorantly label them as “trash” or “druggies”.
    rewrite that before you turn it in.

    I won't go on, because I don't think you posted this for a proof-read session.

    Thanks. And no, i didn't post it for proof-reading. I wanted discussion on the topics covered in my essay no matter what stand you take; just like you did with 1. And 2.

    1. Because some people can't get any other job. Especially in Miami where its almost impossible to find one. Im Hispanic and in no way racist or xenophobic, but most jobs are filled by illegals who will take below minimum wage under the table. I was more getting at how you would waste most hours of your life to not have one. Idgaf if u give handjobs to squirrels, if you work full time doing ANYTHING you goddamn earned your right to stable living.

    2. Its Miami. Demand is so high while we have a tittyload of new immigrants coming in every day. I don't see that shit going down any time soon.

    Thanks dude! I appreciate your criticisms. They were pretty good.

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  • isurfneptune
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    Originally posted by wil747 View Post
    You compared minimum wage to average rent. Compare average wage to average rent
    Thank you for the constructive criticism. It's the average rent for a studio apt, which is the cheapest layout for an independent person. Also, ask anyone from Miami, most of the "studios" here are shitty refurbished sheds or garages in someones backyard. So trust me, thats the average for the cheapest shit around.

    Thanks dude.

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  • Apsley Cherry-Garrard
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    I am not pro-homeless in any way, shape or form; This is based solely on the position you take.


    1. Being PAID any amount of money is in no way a punishment - let alone a cruel and unusual one. Nobody is forcing that person to take/work a minimum wage job. Nobody - no matter how you put it. That person has every option to apply for any job they are qualified for. Your teacher isn't going to be "blown away" by this idea, he/she is going to think you're an idiot.

    2. Why do you attack minimum wage instead of the outrageous housing prices? A studio apartment for $1,400/month and you're attacking minimum wage? Also, nobody is forcing that person to live alone in a studio apartment. How much does it cost to rent a room in a house in Miami-Dade? Why not get a roommate? What if Mary bought a $4,000 RV and didn't have to pay $1,400/month? Again, nobody is forcing anybody to live in a $1,400 studio apartment.


    aside from that, your last sentence is a mess"
    "Using a housing plan composed of three phases –emergency, transitional, and permanent – along with supportive services and job placement, perhaps it isn’t the approach of the Homeless Trust that’s ineffective, but our Minimum Wage that is ineffective at protecting the full-time workers right to be a productive member of society instead of banishing them to live on the streets while other members of society ignorantly label them as “trash” or “druggies”.
    rewrite that before you turn it in. You never mentioned anything about a housing plan before, so why bring it up in the last sentence of the essay?

    I won't go on, because I don't think you posted this for a proof-read session.
    Last edited by Apsley Cherry-Garrard; 24.09.2013, 21:57.

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  • wil747
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    You compared minimum wage to average rent. Compare average wage to average rent

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  • My Expository Essay on Homelessness (Please Read)

    Its too big to upload as an attachment so i copy-pasted it straight from Word. It hasn't been graded yet, but there's some pretty crazy shit i found in my research in this and i wanted to get it out there, so please discuss. Before anyone asks; yes... my name is Welby.



    Welby Pena #0217791
    September 22, 2013
    ENC101 Philip Cunill

    A Lesser Discussed Cause of Homelessness

    There are an estimated one thousand homeless in Miami-Dade County. However, it is important to note that not all homeless people are “crack-heads” and “burn-outs” as some so ignorantly put it. To become homeless, one does not even need to be a victim of some great misfortune, such as a natural disaster, either. While it may be true that unemployment is on the rise, plenty of taxpaying, hard working citizens employed full time are living on the streets, financially deprived, because wages are too low to support themselves independently.

    Florida’s Minimum Wage is set at $7.79 an hour. A full-time work week is typically defined at 40 hours a week before being paid for Overtime at one and one-half the workers regular rate of pay. If a worker earned 40 hours of Minimum Wage every week, for all 52 weeks of the year, with no vacation, that worker would have earned a total of $16,203.20 by the end of the year before taxes. For illustrative purposes we will call this fictional worker “Mary”.

    In Miami-Dade County, the average rent for a studio apartment as of July 1, 2013 is $1,491 a month. “Mary” will rent a studio apt at this price. “Mary” isn’t required to pay taxes. She receives free utilities, healthcare, food, transportation, clothing, and anything else she may need, other than her rent. If the only thing “Mary” pays is her $1,491 monthly rent, she will be $1,688.80 in debt by the end of the year at her pay rate, and will most likely be unable to renew her lease. To qualify for government assistance in Miami-Dade County, the annual income limit is set strictly at $13,750; “Mary” does not qualify. For other full-time Minimum Wage workers who must pay taxes, utilities, healthcare, food, transportation, and clothing, and other expenses, life is seemingly impossible; often resulting in homelessness.

    Amendments 5, 8, 9, 13 and 14 of the United States Constitution are being violated in the case of the independent, full time, Minimum wage, 40 hours a week, 52 weeks of the year worker. The inability to support oneself in a safe dwelling with all things necessary for life is interpreted as being “deprived of Life, Liberty, and Property without due process of law” in violation of Amendments five and eight. Furthermore, Amendment nine is being violated by disparaging the basic human rights not listed in the Constitution, of food, health, hygiene, clothing, and shelter for the full-time Minimum Wage worker. The necessity to work Overtime every single week just for the ability to cover basic necessities is an involuntary one, and is interpreted as a violation of Amendment 13, as it states “Neither slavery nor involuntary service, except as a punishment for crime whereof the party shall have been duly convicted, shall exist within the united states, or any place subject to their jurisdiction.” The enforcement of a Minimum Wage that does not cover basic living expenses for a Minimum Wage full-time worker, nor allow for basic privileges such as the saving of money, affording any clothing, purchasing insurance, or enjoy common recreational activities is interpreted as a violation of Amendment 14 where it states “No state shall make or enforce any law which shall abridge the privileges or immunities of citizens of the United States”. But can the deprivation of an independent Minimum Wage full-time worker also be considered “cruel and unusual punishment” under Amendment 8 of the United States Constitution?

    In the Supreme Court case of Furman v. Georgia, Mr. Justice Brennan concurred that there are four principles by which one would use to determine whether a punishment is “cruel and unusual”. The first principle is quoted as “…the essential predicate for the application of the others, is that a punishment must not, by its severity, be degrading to human dignity.” – Clearly, any homeless person relegated to cooking their food over an open fire in the park, sleeping on the sidewalk, having to “go” outside, and anything that may take place as a result of homelessness is degrading to human dignity. The second principle “derives from the notion that the State does not respect human dignity when, without reason, it inflicts upon some people a severe punishment that it does not inflict upon others”; then surely the case of Minimum Wage for select workers and the inability to support oneself resulting in homelessness would qualify as a cruel and unusual punishment on this second principle alone. “A third principle inherent in the Clause is that a severe punishment must not be unacceptable to contemporary society”. Homelessness and the inability to support oneself independently is something that has never been accepted in society and most likely never will. The final principle is the most important, stating that a punishment must not be excessive. Justice Brennan defines a punishment as being excessive “if it is unnecessary”, “nothing more than the pointless infliction of suffering”, and if “there was no reason whatever for doing so”. There is no crime in being a full-time taxpaying worker, hence unnecessary and excessive. Thus forth, the unnecessary punishment of financial impairment at the price of 40 or more labor hours a week and the oppression of inescapable debt, and other handicaps caused by such financial impairment is cruel and unusual punishment under Amendment 8 of the United States Constitution as defined by Supreme Court Justice Brennan in the case of Furman v. Georgia, and therefore illegal!

    It has been said that Miami-Dade County has been praised as having one of the best systems in the country for addressing the problem of homelessness, I disagree. The homeless population has gone down to 1/8th of what it had been since the foundation of the Homeless Trust in 1993, but it is simply not enough. In the past three years the homeless population has been rising again. As more and more people return to homelessness after two decades of a seemingly effective system of combating homelessness, maybe it’s time to reevaluate. Using a housing plan composed of three phases –emergency, transitional, and permanent – along with supportive services and job placement, perhaps it isn’t the approach of the Homeless Trust that’s ineffective, but our Minimum Wage that is ineffective at protecting the full-time workers right to be a productive member of society instead of banishing them to live on the streets while other members of society ignorantly label them as “trash” or “druggies”.



    Works Cited:

    http://www.dol.gov/whd/regs/compliance/whdfs22.htm
    http://www.zillow.com/local-info/FL-...D2964%26el%3D0
    http://www.miamidade.gov/housing/income-limits.asp
    http://www.archives.gov/exhibits/cha...ranscript.html
    http://www.archives.gov/exhibits/cha...nts_11-27.html
    http://www.law.cornell.edu/supct/htm..._0238_ZC1.html
    http://www.miamidade.gov/homeless/accomplishments.asp
    Last edited by isurfneptune; 24.09.2013, 20:26.
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